Unruly schmunruly! I think volatile is much better.
Seeing Volatile & Steady side by side felt awkward, which is why I changed it. The Hot/Cold contrast was awesome, but Volatile/Steady felt a bit... overdone?
Gah, so hard! Taken under consideration - I may well jump back to volatile again.
The "on a miss" clauses jump out at me. I found when I was designing my basic moves that if I had to write "on a miss...," it meant that I hadn't fully generalized the move to myself. It meant that I was designing an instance of the move, not the underlying move I was shooting for. For example: when you're running away and you miss the roll, why isn't "you get away, but you expose your true self to the wrong person" a legit outcome?
Hm. Yeah, I get what you mean. I can strip the "on a miss" results from When you turn someone on
and When you run away from a situation
without losing anything.
And I can make one of the MC's listed moves "expose someone's true self to the wrong person," and generalize that threat, and thus strip the "on a miss" result from When you try to keep it together
I really like the on a miss result for When you lash out
, though. It speaks to something I think is true about the genre - when you lash out at others, that's when you're most likely to be vulnerable. And so while I'm happy to let the others slide, this one matters to me. Vx, counsel me - am I heading down the wrong design path, here?
Along the same lines, if it were me I'd promote the very delicious final clause of the abyss move right up to a move of its own: "Sometimes the abyss will make a demand of you. Meet its demand or become your Darkest Self."
My internal monologue at the moment: "What the fuck, you can do that?!"
Neat. I'm having trouble seeing this as a wholly independent move, but seeing it easily as a corollary to gazing into the abyss... like how the psychic maelstrom might ask you questions, the abyss might make demands. So, maybe that's the solution?
And I can't help commenting on the unwelcome topic! Sex is a lightning rod. (1) I agree with Shreyas. (2) You could, if you wanted, make it the subject's move. "When someone is turning you on, tell them; they roll+hot..."
I don't think making it the subject's move is the right solution here, because turning others on is the primary way in which people wrack up Strings. You don't want people having strings against you (in that actually-i-love-it-because-i'm-an-indie-sadist sort of way).
But I like that you're spinning the move around and looking at it from different angles, and I should take some time to do the same.